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Post by tavvles on Oct 5, 2024 4:36:19 GMT
You, Me, the Ending Between is a vibes based story with a healthy sprinkling of plot about turning twenty three. You can expect more pictures than words, atmosphere, and lots of mood lighting. I'm hoping to update every week, but I've struggled with that in the past, so we'll see xD P.S. I am open to constructive criticism, so pile it on me! |
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Post by tavvles on Oct 5, 2024 4:40:22 GMT
So anyway, here's chapter 1   |
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Post by GlacierSnow on Oct 5, 2024 11:58:26 GMT
Off to a great start!
I'm a fan of stories where the narrative the POV character is telling doesn't quite match what appears to be going on. Your main character's "I was already up and everything is fine" message to her mom feels like that, and it's got me hooked because I'm curious what she is really feeling. The dream sequence and the ending where she sees something in the window that is sort of reminiscent of the dream imagery, is intriguing. Definitely interested to see where this goes.
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Post by tavvles on Oct 6, 2024 3:52:57 GMT
GlacierSnow Hiya thanks for reading and commenting ❤️ Yeah! I might have been projecting a bit when writing about lying to mom, so I hope that feels somewhat realistic xD Also I’m glad the dreaminess of all the screenshots came across well, since the ‘dream vibes’ is basically 90% of the entire premise. Once again, thank you! 
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Post by tavvles on Oct 12, 2024 3:09:12 GMT
Chapter 2  |
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Post by GlacierSnow on Oct 12, 2024 13:10:51 GMT
Excellent chapter! I left you a comment on the blog. Do you have a preference for whether readers leave comments there or here?
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Post by tavvles on Oct 13, 2024 7:15:39 GMT
GlacierSnow Hiya thanks for reading and commenting <3 I don't mind where you comment, wherever is easiest for you is fine
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Post by HermioneSims on Oct 16, 2024 19:36:48 GMT
Wow, new story! The plot is still very mysterious, so all I'll say it that I'm very intrigued to understand what's going on, both on the normal-life side (university & co) and on the fantastic one (dreams & co). And I agree with everyone else about the pictures, they really stand out! Can The Sims really look this way?  |
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Post by tavvles on Oct 17, 2024 11:35:55 GMT
Hi HermioneSims thanks for commenting! The plot mysteries will be unveiled.... slowly! I hope it's as fun to read as it was for me to screenshot |
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Post by arieltriffic on Oct 17, 2024 11:35:56 GMT
I love, love, love this story. It's like Alice in Wonderland meets 2024. Anyway, the protagonist is super relatable (at least to me). There are days for me that look foggy like that. And the world around me is too beautiful or too intense to be real. And GlacierSnow is right about the internal argument - especially in thrift shops. I'm really curious to see where this goes. It was wonderful. |
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Post by tavvles on Oct 17, 2024 11:41:42 GMT
arieltriffic Thank you so much for your comment <3 I'm glad you found the protagonist relatable, I channeled a lot of my own feelings into her. I tried to convey the feelings through screenshots more than the words, so I hope that comes across as well. Super happy to have you along for the ride!
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Post by tavvles on Oct 19, 2024 3:16:10 GMT
Chapter 3, in which the protagonist finally get a name.  |
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Post by arieltriffic on Oct 19, 2024 15:28:02 GMT
Oh, my! Is this some sort of underworld, only reached through dreams? Is it a place for the dead or dying? I have so many questions! |
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Post by EvilBnuuy on Oct 19, 2024 23:58:27 GMT
OH OH OH OHO HOH OH OH In-between space....THAT REMINDS ME of a certain aspect of something else you've written before : O I love love LOVE the screenshots again, so dreamlike! Wondering if this is some kind of underworld spot. I like that they have abstract-type names. Oh and the place is so beautiful ;-; Oof, Solidarity you need to chill! |
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Post by tavvles on Oct 20, 2024 3:07:45 GMT
Thank you for your comments <3 arieltriffic That's a great guess! The unresponsive people do give off that 'passing to the underworld' vibe. Hopefully I can answer your questions in the next few chapters!
EvilBnuuy Yup I seem to love writing about these in between stuff, I keep coming back to it xD I had a great time taking these screenshots and picking their concept names, I'm really glad you liked!
And yes, Solidarity definitely needs to chill lol
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